Writing Assessment: Paragraph, Slides of English Philology

Download Writing Assessment: Paragraph and more Slides English Philology in PDF only on Docsity! MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 1 DRAFT Writing Assessment: Paragraph Contents: 1. List of Suggested Paragraph Topics 2. List of Textbooks with Narrative and Descriptive Writing Lesson Plans and Materials 3. Sample Writing Lessons (Narrative and Descriptive) 4. Paragraph Checklist 5. Proofreading Symbols 6. Rubric for Scoring Paragraphs 7. Samples of Other Intermediate Level Paragraphs * *Writing selections adapted from “MCC ESL Writing Across Levels" MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 2 DRAFT List of Suggested Topics The paragraph can be descriptive or narrative. Narration Write a story about  The best / worst decision you ever made  Coming to the U.S.A.  A difficult experience living in another country  Your best / worst day of your life  A change in your life  Your goals / plans for the future  A vacation you took  A vacation you want to take  Your life story (autobiography)  The biography of a friend / classmate / someone famous  An accident / a mistake  Your life in the past compared to now  Your _________ experience (scary, rewarding, happy, interesting, unusual, exciting, etc.) Description Describe a person / people:  Your family  A family member  Your hero / heroine  A person you admire  Your best friend  Your boyfriend / girlfriend / husband / wife  Someone who has had an influence on your life  Yourself (your character)  An important person  Qualities of a good parent / student / teacher / employee / spouse / friend Describe a place:  Your favorite place  Your neighborhood  Your home  An important / special place  Your hometown  A place you want to visit Describe something else:  Your favorite food, place, holiday, time of the year  Your job  Your typical day  Your dream vacation  Your favorite ___________ MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 5 DRAFT Sample Paragraph: Maria Rosas ESL Level 5 Oct. 30, 2008 My Worst Vacation My worst vacation was last year. I went to Chicago to visit a friend. We had plans to visit many places, but on the first day I was there, I fell down on an icy sidewalk and broke my foot. My friend called an ambulance, and I went to the hospital. I spent the rest of the vacation in the hospital. If you ever visit Chicago in the winter, be careful when you walk on the sidewalks. Practice: Write a paragraph together as a whole class:  Show the pictures (out of order). Talk about the vocabulary, stressing the need to use correct verb tenses (past). Write key vocabulary words and verbs on the board. Ask students to sequence the pictures (choose which picture is first, second, etc.). MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 6 DRAFT MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 7 DRAFT Images (in correct order) from Get Ready to Write:  Next, model by eliciting ideas and writing the paragraph on the board. Ask students what this story is all about (in two to three words) and suggest that this could be the title.  Ask students to expand on the title by volunteering a complete sentence and suggest that this sentence could be the topic sentence.  Ask students to volunteer one or more sentences to describe the actions in each picture and indicate to the students that these sentences are supporting sentences.  Read what has been recorded. Elicit and suggest sentence combining to make short, choppy sentences more complex, where necessary.  Elicit and suggest transition words and phrases where necessary (then, next, after that, finally, etc.). MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 10 DRAFT MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 11 DRAFT MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 12 DRAFT Application: Review the sample paragraph (My Worst Vacation) and the paragraph the class wrote together, asking students to identify the key elements of a paragraph (topic sentence, supporting sentences, concluding sentence, etc.). Explain the following prompt for the paragraph writing assignment: Write a paragraph about a memory from your past. Include:  A title and good format (indent, double space)  A topic sentence that tells the reader your main idea and grabs the attention of the reader (a hook)  Details that tell what happened in time order (4 or more sentences)  A concluding sentence that tells: – what you learned (the lesson) – OR what advice you have for other people in the same situation – OR how you feel about the situation now – OR how the event changed you or your life – OR what you will do in the future if something similar happens again Supply possible topic sentences for students to consider: • One of the funniest memories I have happened when … • A very _________ thing happened to me on my first … • One time my friends (or family) and I had a(n) __________ experience … • My trip to __________ was very …. • One of the most enjoyable times I have ever had was the time I … • My scariest experience happened when … • My most embarrassing experience happened when … Ask students to report their initial topic ideas by writing their names and topics (e.g., my scariest experience) on a piece of paper. Later, return the papers to students and ask questions about their topics, such as “What happened?” Once students have chosen their topics, model the following writing web, asking students to do their own webs and pointing out that the purpose of this step is to get ideas on paper, not to focus on writing complete sentences or worry about spelling or grammar: MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 15 DRAFT Instructor Sample Paragraph: My embarrassing experience happened eight years ago here at MiraCosta College. I was with a class of beginning level students. On that day, I taught them vocabulary words for the parts of the body. I tried to explain “toes,” but some people in the class did not understand. Then I decided to take off my shoe. I had a big hole in my socks and my toes stuck out. I felt humiliated because many students laughed. In conclusion, I learned that you should check your socks before taking off your shoes in front of a class full of students, wear sandals when teaching about body vocabulary, or use pictures. Revising Ask students to draft their first versions. Have students self-evaluate and/or peer evaluate their writing with the checklist. Model how to use the checklist with a sample paragraph. Use the editing marks to assist students in finding and correcting their errors in subsequent drafts. Editing / Proofreading Use the proofreading marks and conferencing to provide students with feedback on their writing for the revision process. Don’t correct or rewrite students’ paragraphs for them. Model how to comprehend the proofreading marks and self correct. Give ample time and opportunities to revise. Evaluation Assessors evaluate students’ paragraphs with the rubric. Norming sessions will ensure that students’ paragraphs are scored uniformly across the program by level. Application Students will be able to write narrative and descriptive paragraphs with topic sentences, supporting details, and concluding sentences in correct paragraph format. MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 16 DRAFT Sample Paragraphs from Level 5, Fall 2008: Available online at http://mccesl5.blogspot.com A Day to Remember A year ago had the experience of my life. My friend Ana called to invite me to see her jump from an airplane. I was really impressed because I new she was a crazy girl but no that much and I thought I want to see when she says “Oh I can not do it”, so I went to see the show. When we got to the place she told that one of her friends was going to jump with her. We were waiting for her more than an hour but the time was up. She was so angry and sad because she had paid for the tickets two months ago more than 400 dollars. She sad I can not do it myself so let's get out of here. She broke my heart when I saw her face and I had to something. After a couple minutes I asked her “If you want I can jump with you” and she said right away yeah go, go, go. I never new how but when I opened my eyes I was 10,000 feet up there. A man behind me sad ready go and we were flying like eagles. When I was flying I felt that my body, my mind and my soul were free like never before. Now I know why God did not give us wings. I never ever thought to do something like these but it was incredible. Some things are not like they look like. I will remember it for the rest of my life. My Saddest Memory My saddest memory happened nine years ago in my country. I received a phone call from my Uncle telling me that my Aunt had an accident car. She passed away. I will never forget this day and the following day at her funeral because there were a lot problems. I miss her a lot. My Bad Experience My bad experience happened last year when I when to the mall in Oceanside with my daughters and I forgot my keys in the car. When I went back to my car, I didn’t see my keys in my wallet, I looked inside the car and I saw my keys inside the car. My baby was hungry, and my baby’s diapers and baby bottle was in the car. I didn’t have any copy of my keys. I called my friend,and he came with a key and opened my car. In conclusion, it is a good idea to have one copy of your keys in your wallet or at your house. My Funny Experience My funny experience happened when I was 18 years old. A friend asked me if we could go eat, I said yes. Later we stopped at 7-11 and he bought two hot dogs for .99 cents and only one drink. He said we could share the drink. I got surprised. I did not say anything. I just learned when you out, always carry some money with you in case you are still hungry or thirsty. Why do you think I married him? My Saddest Memory My saddest memory happened two years ago in Tijuana at my home. I was with my family,we were eating when my feter asked me, were is your pet? I said it is out side. He told me,no it is not and then, I went out side and didn’t see my doog! I was very sad because I lost my dood. I culde not fin it,but Igot another doog.In conclusion,if you hava a pet, take care of it. My worst Memory happened five years ago at my home in Mexicali When my mother was sick I decided to go to the united states With my friend to work my mother cried and was very sad to my Conclusion if this ever happens to me again I will I would never have chosen to leave her and go such a far distance from her. MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 17 DRAFT My scare experience My scare experience happened two years ago. In my home when I was staying with my family. I was scare of all snakes. One day I slept in the afternoon .When I woke up, I saw a snake beside my bed. I was really scared. I shouted help, and my mom came. She told me it was not a real snake .My brother put it there .in conclusion, everybody don’t kid like this .Some people could have a shock. My Saddest Memory My saddest memory was when I got the bad news that my father had died. I was sad thinking that I was not going to be able to see him for the last time. During this time I had to leave my job and children to go see him all the way to Fresno, California because most of the family was over there. In conclusion I feel sad because this is the first anniversary of my father’s death. I miss him. My Embarrassing Experience My embarrassing experience happened when I was dancing, and my shirt ripped in the back, but I didn’t know what happened. Everyone laughed, and I couldn’t understand why. Finally I realized what everyone was laughing about. In conclusion , don’t dance so much that you rip your clothes and have to go home. SAMPLE LESSON PLAN: DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAGH WRITE A PARAGRAPH ABOUT A FAVORITE PLACE Language Skill Practice Writing: Using a topic sentence, supporting details, and a concluding sentence Grammar Focus Compound and Complex Sentences, Conjunctions, Verb Tenses Depending on Topic (see list of suggested topics) Materials needed  Exercise 1: Sentence Combining  Exercise 2: Sentence Combining Practice  Exercise 3: Web for Writing about a Favorite Place  Exercise 4: Paragraph Outline (Low Intermediate) Paragraph Questions (High Intermediate)  Model Outline for Writing about a Favorite Place  Sample Paragraph about a Favorite Place MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 20 DRAFT Sample Paragraph Outline My Favorite Place My favorite place is ________________________________, which is located _________________________. I like to go there when I am ________________ or _________________. It’s a _____________ with ____________________. It has _________ and ______________. When I am there, I always ___________________. I first found this spot when ____________________. I was ____________________ when suddenly I ___________________. From that time on, I have _______________________. ______________ knows I like to go there. ____________________________. I have taken / have never taken _________________ to this spot because _______________. This place is my favorite because it ___________________________. Paragraph Questions Explain to students that the web exercise was a planning tool for writing their paragraphs. For high intermediate students, model how to write complete sentences to the questions and then copy the answers in paragraph form. MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 21 DRAFT Sample Paragraph Questions: 1. What is your favorite place? My favorite place is … 2. Where is it located? 3. What can you see there? 4. How did you find it or how did it become your favorite place? 5. When did you find it or when did it become your favorite place? 6. Have you shared your favorite place with anyone or spent time there with someone special? If yes, with whom? When? If not, why not? 7. How does this place make you feel? Why? Sample Paragraph My Cozy Living Room My favorite place is my living room in my house because it is a place with a lot of activity. It is a typical living room with a TV, couch, chair, coffee table, and bookshelf, but the people inside make it special. My daughter, husband, and I spend a lot of time there. It is the place where I spend my weekends talking with my family, watching movies, getting the latest news, and reading. My living room has been my favorite place for a long time now. I have rarely shared this MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 22 DRAFT place with others outside my immediate family. This place makes me feel warm, cozy, and relaxed, and that is why it is my favorite place to be in the whole world. Sample Paragraphs from Level 5, Fall 2008: Available online at http://mccesl.pbwiki.com/ My Favorite Place My favorite place is my living room,in my apartment because it is a place with a lot of activity.It is a typical living room with a tv, two sofas, two little birds, and it has plants, pictures, but the people inside make it special. My daughter, Sons, and I spend a lot of time there. It is the place where I spend my weekends talking with my family, talking about school, work, place,and watching movies. My living room is the happiest and most relaxing place for me. My favorite place My favorite is the football pitch in Oceanside because it is a place with a lot activity. It is a typical football pitch with green grass, white lines, and happy people, and I spend a lot of time there. It is the place where I spend my weekends playing with my family and friends and running. The football pitch has been my favorite place for a long time now. I have rarely shared this place with others outside my immediate family. This place makes me feel happy, relaxed, and exited and that is why it is my favorite place to place to be in the whole world. My Amazing Beach My favorite place is Ixtapa, Gro, Mexico. because it is a place with a lot of fun. There is an amazing beach with hotels, disco-bars, museums, nature and special people. My family and I spend a lot ohf time there. It is the place where we go every weekend because we lived near, one hour by car. This beach has been my favorite place since 2005. I have always shared this place with my family and friends. That place makes me feel happy, comfortable, and relaxed, and that is why it is my favorite place to be in Mexico. MY FAVORITE PLACE My favorite place is the beach. It is located in Carlsbad. I can see the blue ocean, the sunset, the moon, stars, and dolphins. It has been my favorite MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 25 DRAFT MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 26 DRAFT PARAGRAPH CHECKLIST Directions: Check Yes/No Self Self Peer Peer Yes No Yes No Paragraph Content 1. Does the paragraph have a topic sentence? 2. Does the paragraph have at least three supporting details? 3. Does the paragraph have a concluding sentence? 4. Is the meaning of each sentence clear? Paragraph Format 1. Does the paragraph have a title? 2. Is the paragraph indented? 3. Is the paragraph double-spaced? 4. Is the paragraph within margins? Grammar and Punctuation 1. Does each sentence begin with a capital letter? 2. Does each sentence end with punctuation? 3. Are all the words spelled correctly? MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 27 DRAFT PROOFREADING SYMBOLS CHART 1 SYMBOL DEFINITION EXAMPLE SP Spelling The woman has eihgt children. The woman has eight children. P Punctuation We go to school everyday__ We go to school everyday. C Capitalization I love to speak english. I love to speak English. WW Wrong Word He lives at Vista. He lives in Vista. ^ Add a Word You should speak to ^ teacher. You should speak to the teacher. X Take Out a Word Do you go to the work? Do you go to work? SV Subject/Verb Agreement She live in a big house. She lives in a big house. VT Verb Tense I go to the beach yesterday. I went to the beach yesterday. AG Agreement Three boy went to school. Three boys went to school. ? Unclear Meaning She likes very today. She likes to play tennis every day. → Indent This is the first sentence in a paragraph. This is the first sentence in a paragraph. WO* Word Order They went yesterday to school. They went to school yesterday. WF* Wrong Form She is a beauty woman. She is a beautiful woman. SF* Sentence Fragment Because I was tired. I went to bed because I was tired. RO* Run-on Sentence He walks to school and because of the big school he gets lost but he likes it. He walks to school. The school is big and sometimes he gets lost but he likes it. *OPTIONAL MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 30 DRAFT Samples of Other Intermediate Level Paragraphs MiraCosta College Noncredit Program Intermediate Level Writing Outcome: Paragraph 31 DRAFT