Download Using Exemplar Essays for Effective Learning: A Case Study on 'You've Got a Friend in Me' and more Lecture notes Technical English in PDF only on Docsity! Advanced | Exemplar Essay Using Exemplars in Your Lessons Exemplar essays are tools to take abstract descriptions and make them more concrete for students. One way to use them is to print the clean copies of the essays and allow students to use the rubric to make notes or even find examples of important elements of an essay - thesis statements, introductions, evidence, conclusions, transitions, etc. Teachers can also use exemplars to illustrate what each score point within a trait ‘looks like’ in an authentic student essay. For additional ideas, please see “25 Ways to Use Exemplar Essays” by visiting the Curriculum Resources page in Help. You've Got a Friend in Me That's What Friends are For Plot and Ideas The narrative is highly engaging and introduces a clear setting and characters. A topic is clearly introduced ("Deep down inside, though, I knew I needed to practice on my hook shot, and I vowed to practice outside my house as soon as I got home. I knew I would need help”). Development and Elaboration The narrative uses techniques such as dialogue, description, and pacing to develop the topic and characters. The theme of friendship is evident throughout the narrative (“Cole, that’s what friends are for” and “Afterward, I knew from that moment on that I could always count on JJ for help”). Organization and Sequencing The organization is clear and coherent within this narrative. It effectively incorporates pacing to support the development of the story. A variety of transitions are used (“Afterward,” “At last,” “Meanwhile,” and “At this point”) to convey a sequence of events within the narrative. Language and Style In this narrative, word choice could be varied a bit more, but the writing showcases skill in sentence variety. The writing is interesting and uses descriptive language that is relevant to the topic (“Immediately, our coach came up to us after the game with tears of happiness”). Notes Exemplar Essay Page 1 of 3 You've Got a Friend in Me That's What Friends are For Around a year ago, my basketball team won our playoff game, and that meant that we had made it to finals. Even though I was thrilled, this meant I would have 3 whole days to prepare for the game of a lifetime. I was so proud of my team, the Bulldogs. Immediately, our coach came up to us after the game with tears of happiness. “I am so proud of you guys. Great job team! You really showed them who’s boss!” he exclaimed. In my head, I told myself, “I am ready for the finals." Deep down inside, though, I knew I needed to practice on my hook shot, and I vowed to practice outside my house as soon as I got home. I knew I would need help. After that thought hit me, I called my best friend on the team, JJ, who was a great shooter. He agreed to come over and help me practice. It would help him out too, since he was on the team. When he arrived, we ran out to my old raggedy driveway ready to practice on my old basketball hoop. At this point, I wanted JJ to know how much it meant to me. “JJ, I really appreciate you coming over to help,” I told him. “Cole, that’s what friends are for, “ he replied with an friendly smile. About that time, I realized I was going about my hook shot all wrong. Seeing my frustration, JJ suggested, “You need to face the basket sideways so that your shooting hand dribbling the ball is facing away from the basket." Knowing his advice made sense, I tried again. The ball flew in the air and I was for sure it would go in. We both looked at the ball in the air for what seemed forever. However, it made its way towards the basket, and then…nothing. The ball hit the backboard
